John Wallace Middle School
Date: April 21, 2008
School: John Wallace Middle School
Slug: Dangerous Websites
Length: 48 (use pad from beginning)
DELIVERY: Good energy and inflection. Nice location for the stand up.
INTERVIEWS: Great person to interview. Good job writing into the bite. Would have been interesting to hear about the number of arrest in CT associated with the web.
ORIGINALITY: Very good.
WRITING: The writing needs some work. The story needs to be unbiased. Relay the facts don't give opinions. Opinions should be given through the interviews and attributed to the source. For example you say "Millions of people are in danger each day by using MySpace," who said this? You need say if the police officer says that or if it was stated in a report somewhere.
VIDEO: Good job. Nice mix of tight, medium and wide shots. Work on the composition of the interviews.
AUDIO: Good. Consistant levels.
EDITING: Nice job. Flowed nicely.
OVERALL: Good story idea and well shot but you need to work on attributing facts and statements. If the story is on the dangers of the internet make sure the opinions are attributed to their source.
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