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Date: April 26, 2008
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford Green Monument Ban
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good energy in stand up. There were parts of the story that seemed rushed. It is a lot of information to put in 50 seconds but remember to pause so that the viewer can follow.

INTERVIEWS: Nice use of establishing shot. Nice job showing both sides of the story. Great job getting interview with the chairman to explain reason they decided not to add more monuments.

ORIGINALITY: Excellent story idea. Newsworthy topics.

WRITING: Very well written. Nice job setting up the story and explaining both sides. Covered why the city had the ban and why some people wanted a new monument.

VIDEO: Good shots of monuments and green.

AUDIO: Good.

EDITING: Nice job.

OVERALL: Good story. Well written and put together.

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School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Local Teen Runs Online Business
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good energy. Was rushed when describing what the business is.

INTERVIEWS: Great sound bites. Supported the story.

ORIGINALITY: Excellent.

WRITING: Good, but would have liked to have heard a little more about the business and how it succeeded.

VIDEO: Good job getting a variety of shots. Good b roll of Peter working.

AUDIO: Good levels.

EDITING: Nice job matching b roll to video. Flowed nicely.

OVERALL: Great story idea. Nice job describing this role model. Would have liked to hear more about business but you did a great job in the short time of 50 seconds to tell the story.

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Date Posted: March 12, 2008
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Home Energy Fair
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good. Work on track could using more inflection to "sell" the story.

INTERVIEWS: Good people to interview and very good sound bites.

ORIGINALITY: Very good.

WRITING: Well written. Nice job writing into second sound bite. Using "says" instead of "explains" leading into first sound bite would have made it more conversational.

VIDEO: Varied and interesting. Good composition for the interview shots. Should have used a tripod for steadier b roll shots. Didn't need exterior shots of the library, the fair itself would have been fine.

AUDIO: Clean and clear. Sound bite audio was excellent. Standup gave good information.

EDITING: Good variety of shots that moved the story along well.

OVERALL: Good. Using a Tripod would have improved it. The lead in and lead out shots should have been continuations of the first and last shot of the story.

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Date Posted: May 1, 2007
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Mentoring at Simon Lake
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Work on a clear delivery. It was difficult to understand the voiceover.

INTERVIEWS: The sound bites did not add to the story. They were reparative of the introduction. Good sound bite from the student. The

ORIGINALITY: Why is this a story? What is the hook?

WRITING: What is the program and why does it work. Why is it successful? What is the program designed to do?

VIDEO: The camera should be at eye level for the person you are interviewing not the person shooting.

AUDIO: There was way too much background noise.

EDITING: There needed to be more B-roll. There was not enough footage to properly edit.

OVERALL: Figure out the focus and write to it by answering your questions. Remember no one else knows about the program or it's history outside you community. Needed more B-roll.

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Date Posted: May 1, 2007
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Gift from the Past
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good.

INTERVIEWS: Great first sound bite, but writing that introduced it didn't go along with it. You said in the voiceover that the explained how the community would benefit from the organ but that wasn't what he talked about.

ORIGINALITY: It could have been a good story with the right hook, but it needed to be more developed.

WRITING: The story needed be developed more. A church getting a new organ is not a news story. What was the hook? Does the organ have historical value? Was the church able to raise an amazing amount of money to get it? The writing needed to go deeper.

VIDEO: You need to show the organ being used. Show someone playing it. You need to show someone near it to show scale. We have no idea how large the organ is without showing a person near it. You needed more B-roll. Shots of the church in service, the organ being used, etc. The woman being interviewed looked blue. Make sure to check your color balance. Good angels on the interviews.

AUDIO: Always use a microphone. The whole story seemed to be off mic. The story really needed natural sound. We NEEDED to hear the organ since it was the main focus of the story.

EDITING: There needed to be more B-roll to properly edit. Show the music director walk up to the organ and play a few bars.

OVERALL: Re-do your audio, find your hook and write to it, and get more meaningful video.

**********2006-2007 Evaluations**********

Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: The Cat's Meow
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good.

INTERVIEWS: The camera was looking up at the interviewee. It should have been on the level with the person being interviewed. It would have made more sense to interview the person who does this than her husband. Good idea to hear from someone else in the neighborhood.

ORIGINALITY: Good idea to look for a service story but there wasn't much to it. She's feeding the cats but they are still strays and not being taken care of.

WRITING: There needed to be more. The voiceover states, "The many kittens will grow up into healthy cats". Who claims that? These cats are being fed but not neutered or vaccinated. Just because they are fed doesn't make them healthy. Maybe this is something that is locally famous, but people that don't live in Milford have not heard of it.

VIDEO: You showed more shots of the restaurant than cats. There was only one cat shown. If there is a large population show that. What were the boxes? They just looked like the back of the restaurant. If that is where the cats live show us some cats there. Show her feeding the cats. There were no shots of the many cats, no feeding shots, too many shots of the restaurant and no shots of Bobbie. Show us the person who is doing the feeding. She was the focus of the story but the video didn't reflect that.

AUDIO: No issues.

EDITING: There wasn't enough B-roll to properly edit.

OVERALL: When you select your story you need to have the elements to make the story work.

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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Best Buddies Program
Status: Re-Submit
Length: N/A

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OVERALL: There was no audio on this story. Please re-submit with audio.

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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Bobett's and Bethel are Butternut Buddies
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Good job.

INTERVIEWS: You picked appropriate people to interview but needed better sound bites.

ORIGINALITY: This could be a good story if you focused on what Butternut Buddies are.

WRITING: The story was not well organized. What are Butternut Buddies? Is there a relationship to the soup and if so why wasn't it in the story. It was unclear what the story was about. What was the proclamation from the mayor regarding? If the restaurant has a history in the town tell us about it. Most of the viewers are not from that town and will not know any background on the restaurant.

VIDEO: Good job getting tight shots but they didn't seem to be relevant to the story.

AUDIO: Good.

EDITING: Work on matching the video and writing. The shots didn't match up well with the script. The video didn't illustrate the story well.

OVERALL: Work on the writing. Find a clear focus and work on organizing the story. Get shots to support your writing.

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Date Posted: April 20, 2007
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford Capoeira Holds Charity for Bethel
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 55

DELIVERY: Good energy in the stand ups but low energy in the voiceover.

INTERVIEWS: The sound bite from the instructor was redundant. It repeated what the voiceover said and then he repeated himself. It would have been better to hear why and how he feels about it. The interview with student was against a blank wall. We would have preferred to hear from someone at the shelter benefiting from the event.

ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.

WRITING: It was too repetitive. Would have like to have heard some more facts or history of him doing this.

VIDEO: There was only one shot of the martial arts. You needed more B-roll such as shots of people in the audience, people making their donation, shots of the Bethel shelter, etc.

AUDIO: Good idea to use natural sound, but it was too high and made the voiceover distorted and too hard to hear.

EDITING: There was a bad edit at the end where it went to black.

OVERALL: Good story idea, but work on more focused writing and editing. Also, the story came in at 55 seconds. The stories need to be 50 seconds to be able to be broadcast.

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Date Posted: April 14, 2006
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford Fire Dept. Class 1 ISO
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Use more energy. The voiceover was a little flat. Make sure you add information in your stand up. You could use the last sentence of your voiceover for the beginning of the stand up.

INTERVIEWS: Good. The interviews were very informative and added a lot to the story. The first interview was a bit too long. Use some of the information from his interview in your voiceover.

ORIGINALITY: Newsworthy.

WRITING: Good. Nice job explaining what ISO is and then why it is important. Use more of the information from the interviews in your voiceover and use shorter sound bites.

VIDEO: Use more B-roll. You need to add some close ups. We were on the same shots for too long. There was a jump cut in the video. Remember to include 5 second of pad at end. We need the pad in post-production. Think about the sun's location when you are shooting outside. There was a shadow on the reporter's face.

AUDIO: Natural sound of the fire engine sound would have really added to the story.

EDITING: Nice job rolling footage over interviews. It was a bit choppy. More B-roll would have helped with editing.

OVERALL: Good. On your next story, shoot more footage and work on tightening up the editing.

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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford's History Kept Alive
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49

DELIVERY: Good. Nice pace and tone.

INTERVIEWS: Great work. Nice job getting the mayor! Great sound bites. Good choices.

ORIGINALITY: Nice community piece. Very interesting.

WRITING: Great opening line. Good job incorporating examples. Interesting information about George Washington. When you are introducing the mayor you said, "Milford's Mayor, Mayor Rich...," there is no need to say mayor twice. You could simply leave it as "Milford's Mayor, Rich..."

VIDEO: Great job. Well thought out. Nice shots! Nice establishing shot of the mayor. Watch the lighting on the second interview.

AUDIO: Good job. Consistent levels.

EDITING: Great job. Nice flow. Great job matching the video to the script.

OVERALL: Great job!

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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Boys and Girls Club of America
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: A little rushed. Slow down to make it easier to understand.

INTERVIEWS: Nice choices. Work on the set up for the first interview. The lead in was awkward because the sound bite didn't go with the intro. Good sound bite from child.

ORIGINALITY: Ok.

WRITING: Make sure to cover all the questions. Why is this program starting? Was there a lack of after school programs or many kids getting into trouble? Add some facts about success in other neighborhoods that started a Boys and Girls Club.

VIDEO: Always use a tripod. The website footage was very shaky. Add more B-roll. Show us more of the activities that kids are participating in. Games, crafts, sports, etc. Watch lighting indoors. The stand up was very dark.

AUDIO: Always use a microphone. The camera mic picked up a lot of ambient sound.

EDITING: More B-roll will help tell the story. There were a few glitches in the 1st interview. Rolling b-roll over it will help.

OVERALL: Tell us more about why the Boys and Girls Club is being started. Give us more information. Add more footage to the story. This will help with editing and the overall flow of the story.

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Date Posted: April 12, 2006
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Helping Hand
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Use more energy. Use your last name in the stand up.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Be more selective with the sound bites you choose. The first sound bite could have been cut out. It really didn't add to the story. It would be much more interesting to hear more facts about the program.

ORIGINALITY: Very good.

WRITING: Cut down on the length of the interviews and add more details to your writing. How many kids participate? How many mentors? Why do students participate? Is it for credit or for fun? Watch out that you don't editorialize. You said it had a very positive effect...that should come from interviews or you could say many participants feel it had a very positive effect.

VIDEO: More footage is needed. More shots of mentors and kids interacting would support the story. Roll B-roll over part of your interview so we are not on the same shot for so long. Always use a tripod. Consider where you set up the background for interviews. It should not be against a blank wall. Try to find something more interesting that ties in with the story. Watch lighting.

AUDIO: No major problems.

EDITING: More footage will help with overall editing. There was a glitch from first video to first sound bite.

OVERALL: Great idea for a story. Re-work the writing and add more B-roll.

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2004-2005 Evaluations

Date Posted: May 16, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Boitumelo
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 42:38

DELIVERY: Slow down a bit and annunciate. Some of the voiceover was very hard to understand.

INTERVIEWS: Great choices, and good information. Seemed like there was more information about to be given but interview was cut off.

ORIGINALITY: Interesting.

WRITING: Good job. Nice work setting up who the family came to Milford and using their sound bites to let the viewer know what their shop does. It may have flowed better if you explained the business first. Add more information. How long has this story been open? How did the idea come about? Make sure you clearly explain why they are helping others and then give some facts. How much money has been given? How was someone helped directly? It sounds like a great story but we need to know more.

VIDEO: Use a tripod at all times. Also, work on framing your shots. Use a variety of long shots and close ups. Your stand up should have been much closer. You looked small and far away.

AUDIO: The music was a bit too loud. It was taking away from your story. Natural sound should be at a level where it adds to the story but does not compete with the voiceover. Also, there was a buzzing through the first segment of the story. This made it hard to understand.

EDITING: Work on crisp cuts. Don't cut from an interview to the same interview. Use B-roll to cover the cut. When you cut to the same interview it looks like a bad edit. You went from the husband to the husband again. Also you cut off your interviewees before they finished their thoughts.

OVERALL: This story has a lot of potential but you need to work on your editing and add more information. Set up your story more. Right now your story is way too short. Remember that the story needs to be 50 seconds in length from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up.

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Date Posted: May 16, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Tsunami Relief in Milford
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50:38

DELIVERY: Good pace. Don't say "Fox 61 Student News" because it would also be airing on WB 20. The sign off needs to be standardized so it can air on both stations.

INTERVIEWS: Good. Great sound bites. Suggestion: Rather than interview a pastor from a different church, focus on the church that is running the relief effort.

ORIGINALITY: Timely and newsworthy.

WRITING: What did they do to help the cause? Great idea, but no information. The most important questions were not addressed. Remember to always cover the questions: who, what, where, when, why and how. You were talking about who from Connecticut was helping with tsunami relief, but then your sound bites only talk about how awful a tragity it was. Try to tie it all in together so you don't lose focus.

VIDEO: Use a tripod. Very shaky. Good idea using pictures since you didn't have video of the disaster. The framing on your first interview needs some work. The pastor was facing the reporter but the camera was not in from of him so it was almost a total profile view of the interviewee. Also, get closer on the framing. The man sitting on the couch being interviewed looked tiny.

AUDIO: Good.

EDITING: A bit choppy. There was a glitch going from the church sign to the shot of the cross.

OVERALL: Work on your writing and answer all the questions. Remember the video and audio pad at the beginning and end of the story. The story is too long. It needs to be exactly 50 seconds. We are not able to edit second off your piece. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up

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Date Posted: May 16, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: American Girl Doll
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 44.12

DELIVERY: Pretty good, but the beginning was too fast and was hard to understand. Good stand-up.

INTERVIEWS: Good interview choices, but make sure you choose your sound bites carefully. Look for sound bites that add information to the story.

ORIGINALITY: Good.

WRITING: You never explained what an American Girl doll is. That seems to be a large part of the story and not everyone is familiar with the product. In order for the audience to understand the story, you need to explain this in the beginning when you are setting up the story. You also need to add more information to the story. You mention that she is pursuing this acting dream, but you don't tell us if she is successful. Did she land a part in the American Girl movie? Even if everyone at your school knows this, no one else does. That would be your hook. Remember to always write to your hook by covering the questions: who, what, where, when, why and how.

VIDEO: Use a tripod at all times. Very shaky shots. It would have been great if you got more shots, especially if you went with her to acting class in NY. Do you have any shots of her acting? That would have really added to the story.

AUDIO: Use a microphone for your interviews. Keep your audio levels consistent throughout. Your interviews were very low.

EDITING: Work on crisp cuts. There were some small editing glitches. For example, the interview with the mother was cut off when she was about to say something.

OVERALL: These stories need to be 50 seconds in length from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. Work on your writing. Find your hook and write to it by covering all the questions. Also, you need 5 seconds of video and natural sound pad at the beginning and end of your story.

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Date Posted: May 16, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: The Luncheon
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 44.76

DELIVERY: It sounds like the voiceover was recorded at two different times. Make sure that you record the voiceover all together so it sounds smoother. Work on annunciating a bit better and run through your voiceover a few times. Suggestion: you only need to walk during your stand-up if there is an express purpose, IE: to show the relationship between one element in the story to another.

INTERVIEWS: Great choices. Loved the location for the second interview. The interviews really added to the story.

ORIGINALITY: Good.

WRITING: Remember to always cover all the questions: who, what, where, why, when, and how. Why do students put on this luncheon? Is it part of a class? Does it help raise money for a good cause? Are the students all Home Ec. students? Think about what makes this news. What is your hook and why would someone outside Jonathan Law High School be interested?

VIDEO: Lots of great shots! Nice job. Remember to always use a tripod.

AUDIO: Remember to use a microphone in your interviews. A camera mic picks up way too much background noise. Your first interview had a lot of background noise.

EDITING: Pretty good. There was a glitch in the audio right before the shot of the girl putting food on the plate. You should have cut your voiceover a little more because we could hear the beginning of your next word. Also, you might have wanted to choose a different sound bite from the student. She is discussing sanitation, but she is serving food with her hair down and no gloves.

OVERALL: Remember stories must be 50 seconds in length from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. Work on covering all the questions in your writing and that should bring you up to 50 seconds. Also, remember you need to have 5 seconds of video and natural sound at the beginning and end of the story. The end of the story is cut off abruptly.

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Date Posted: May 16, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: A New Turf Field
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.53

DELIVERY: Good pace. Flowed nicely. Good place for the stand-up.

INTERVIEWS: Good interview choices. Good information as to why. Work on your introductions. You said assistant coach, but never told us what sport he instructs. Also, work on writing into your interviews. Instead of saying just saying, "He explains," either paraphrase or add info to the piece when you are writing into your interview. For example, ", Coach Smith, feels the new field was worth the wait".

ORIGINALITY: Good.

WRITING: Good, but it would have been stronger with more facts to back up the story. How much did it cost? How long did it take to build? Where did they play before? That type of information would be good to have in the beginning when you are setting up your story.

VIDEO: Always use a tripod. There were quite a few shaky shots. Good footage of the field, but you need more B-roll. Are students now able to practice on it? Shots of sports in action and the field being used would have really added to the story. Also some close ups (especially if you got right on the field). You could have used B-roll during your interviews.

AUDIO: Make sure to use a microphone for interviews.

EDITING: There were some glitches in your editing. Remember enough frames when you do your editing. Try to make smoother transitions. You want crisp cuts. Also, try not to cut from your interviews into your same interview. It looks awkward. If you need to cut up your interview use B-roll to cover the cut.

OVERALL: Good story, but pay closer attention to editing. Also, the story must be exactly 50 seconds. We are not able to edit second off your piece. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up.

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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford Fire Department-Class One
Status: Broadcast
Length: 50

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OVERALL: Good job re-editing story to 50 second length.

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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Tsunami Relief
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 51

DELIVERY: Good pace and tone. Stand-up should have been done in a quieter place.

INTERVIEWS: Great choices. Good introductions.

ORIGINALITY: Timely, relevant and newsworthy.

WRITING: Very well written. Great job explaining their journey and relief efforts.

VIDEO: Lots of great photos. Be careful not to cut from one to the other too quickly. It only happened at the beginning but it looked strange. It seemed like there was some kind of strobe effect on your camera during the interviews and stand-up, not necessary whatever it was.

AUDIO: Interviews were much louder than your voiceover. Try to keep your levels even. There was a lot of background noise on your interviews. Make sure you use a microphone at all times. We didn't see one for your stand-up.

EDITING: Great job cutting from photo to photo and interweaving your interviews.

OVERALL: Good story but it has to be :50 seconds in length. We don't have the capabilities of editing a second off your piece so we will have to defer the story back to you. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up. Re-record the audio with out stumbling over the words. That will speed up the voice over and should get you to :50 seconds. Also, try to get audio levels consistent.

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Date Posted: April 25, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Survival of the Gottschee Heritage
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Slow down a bit. It was a little hard to understand.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices for people to interview. Good introductions. If you start with more information as to what the event is, then their references would be easier to understand. Also, you mention a family going to the event but we never hear from them. It would have been nice to get an interview from one of them and hear why the event is important to them.

ORIGINALITY: Good idea. Nice job traveling to get the story.

WRITING: You need to explain who Gottschees are and what they do -right at the start of the story. What heritage are they celebrating? Without that information the viewer will be confused. We hear Germany and Austria mentioned in an interview but it is not clear if those are the only countries that have Gottschees. When did this group start? Is it a group that started in another country or did they start this here in the United States? What is the relief? What culture are they? Remember you need to answer who, what, where, when, why, and how for every story. This story would be much easier to understand with a clear description of Gottschees and the event at the start of the story.

VIDEO: Lots of good shots. Great job using B-roll over parts of your interviews.

AUDIO: Try to keep audio levels consistent throughout. There were some sections of the story that were noticeably louder than others. Make sure you use a mic for your interviews.

EDITING: Quite a few editing glitches. Work on crisp cuts and leave enough frames when editing so you don't end up with jump cuts. Some of your interviews were cut off before they were done talking.

OVERALL: Good story idea, but you need to work on the writing and editing. Explain more about the Gottschees right upfront. Re-write your voiceover. Tell us what nationality or background the Gottschees consist of. Then tell us why the Connecticut family is going to this "relief", and what a relief is. Also, make sure to work on sharp, crisp cuts.

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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Devon Restoration
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 52.10

DELIVERY: Good delivery and pace. Some parts seemed a bit rushed because you had so much information. You could cut out the third sound bite or shorten some of the sound bites.

INTERVIEWS: You had the right idea to get two different perspectives.

ORIGINALITY: Good story idea.

WRITING: Be careful not to insert your opinions into the story. When you refer to the park as mediocre it appears that you are against this project. Make sure you are objective. A story should be balanced. It is critical that you present both sides of the story. Also, tell us who decided to do the restoration, why they wanted to do it, what is there to do there, etc. Is there a town representative that could give you the other side of the story? People outside that town are not at all familiar with the project, so you need to give them all the vital information. Also, it's great to have sound bites that show differing opinions, just make sure you pick the best clip to use in the story.

VIDEO: Remember to use a light when you shoot footage inside. The second interview was way too dark. Always use a tripod. Your outdoor shots were very shaky. A wider variety of shots would help make the story stronger.

AUDIO: The audio levels were good, but it was choppy because of some editing problems.

EDITING: Work on cleaner cuts. The second interview was cut short. Editing was too choppy. It looked like you jumped around too much a too quickly. Crisp cuts could improve the flow and make it easier to understand the story.

OVERALL: Good story idea, but you need to spend more time editing so it looks smoother. You will need to redo the second interview so we can see the interviewee's face. More footage of the community and areas that you refer to would make the story stronger. Re-write to show both sides of the story, and make sure you do not sound like you are taking sides. It is very important that a journalist stay impartial. Also, the timing needs to be :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over. Right now you are running too long. Work on the writing and editing and re-submit. Make sure you do not go over :50 seconds.

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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Increase in Milk Sales
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.83

DELIVERY: Good pace and flow. The stand-up was hard to understand. It needed to be a bit slower and spoken more clearly.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices of interviewees and great introductions. The interviews added a lot of good information to the piece.

ORIGINALITY: Good idea.

WRITING: Very good! Excellent statistics. Great job getting in a lot of facts. You did a nice job covering who, what, where, when, why, and how. Very well written.

VIDEO: Lots of good shots and great placement. The shot behind the fridge, where somebody was grabbing milk, was great! Nice work getting a variety of shots.

AUDIO: The first interview was too low. Other than that pretty good.

EDITING: Make sure you do crisp edits. No glitches. There seemed to be a couple of jump cuts, and there was a quick shot before your interview that should not have been there. Also, watch that you do not cut in and out of your stand up too quickly.

OVERALL: Great story! Very interesting and very well written. Next time work on the editing. Try for sharp cuts without cutting anything out or adding anything that should not be there.

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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Mall Under Construction
Status: Broadcast
Length: 49.80

DELIVERY: Good pace and flow. Great idea and location for your stand-up. Nice touch wearing the hard hat. Remember to always use a microphone. Your stand-up could barely be heard.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Nice job showing two perspectives. Great job introducing your interviews.

ORIGINALITY: Interesting and newsworthy.

WRITING: Great writing. Nice job covering who, what, where, when, why, and how. Very well written. You told us about the positive aspects the development will bring and also some of the downfalls.

VIDEO: Really good. Great shots of the site, blueprints, parking, mall, etc. Be careful when shooting footage outside. You need to think about the sunlight and where you want your subject. There was a shadow on your first interview's face.

AUDIO: Always use a microphone. Stand-up was drowned out by background noise. Make sure your audio levels are consistent throughout. Your second sound bite was a lot louder than the first.

EDITING: Great job editing. The shots really illustrated what you were talking about. Nice job matching the footage to the script.

OVERALL: Good. Newsworthy piece with great writing and footage. The only major problem is the inconsistent audio levels and not being able to hear the stand-up. This could be a great piece, even considered for a nomination, if you fix your audio issues.

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Date Posted: April 11, 2005
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Milford Fire Department-Class One
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50.28

DELIVERY: Clear delivery. Good pace although it was a bit fast at times.

INTERVIEWS: Good. Great information from both interviews. Great visual of the firefighter being interviewed inside the fire truck.

ORIGINALITY: Good.

WRITING: Great job finding a hook and telling the story. Nice work covering who, why, where, when, why, and how. You included a lot of good information. Good statistics on the fire departments.

VIDEO: Lots of great shots. Good job getting right into the action at the fire department.

AUDIO: Good sound from the fire truck. Allow time to use some of that sound at the beginning of the story. Remember to use a microphone at all times. It seemed like the interviews and your stand-up used the camera microphone because there was a lot of background noise.

EDITING: Very good. Lots of cuts between shots. Nice job using B-roll during your interviews.

OVERALL: Good news story. Good footage and information. We really liked this story, but it has to be :50 seconds in length. We don't have the capabilities of editing a second off your piece so we will have to defer the story back to you. We need this to be exactly :50 seconds from beginning of the voice-over (or clip of natural sound) to the end of the stand-up.

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Date posted: March 31, 2004
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "New Atkin's Products"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50

DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Try to slow down a bit in your voice-over and stand-up. It's just a little fast.

INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): nice job going outside your school to get an interview. The interviews/sound bites are a good way to introduce and/or cover both sides of an issue. Currently, you have only the pro's of the Atkins diet. Instead of a Subway representative, a dietician or health official to discuss the long run pros and cons of a protein only diet would help support your premise.

ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?):

WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): See interview notes. Please remember that a reporter must be impartial to a story and only cover the facts: Who, What, When, Where, Why, and How. Your story changes half way through from the positive effect of the Atkins diet to Subway's new marketing sales campaign to assist those customers who are on low carb diets or "Atkins". What are the long-term effects of being on a low carb diet? Do people really lose more weight and keep it off over the long run with a low carb, high protein diet then just changing their life styles and eating healthy and exercising daily?

VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): Tri-pod at all times, no exceptions! Please don't leave the school without your tri-pod to shoot your images. Using the tri-pod will make your images look professional.

AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good

EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): Good

OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Please consider re-working the script to covering the facts only. Thanks

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Date posted: March 31, 2004
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Milford's Anti-Drug Mural"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :49

DELIVERY: Slow down in your voice-over recording. The speed makes it very difficult to understand your opening lines. Remember to wrap-up your story with a wrap-up line in your ending stand-up.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your interviews.

ORIGINALITY: Good community based story.

WRITING: Good job covering the facts.

VIDEO: More b-roll would help your editing process. Suggestions: images of students working on the murals or hanging the mural.

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: good

OVERALL

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Date posted: March 31, 2004
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Senior Wish Society"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :49

DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery. Nice job on your stand-up.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices on your interview subjects and the sound bites used.

ORIGINALITY: Good community story.

WRITING: Nice job covering the facts and introducing your sound bites.

VIDEO: Good

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: Good

OVERALL: Overall, well done job!

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Date posted: March 26, 2004
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Ballroom Dancing"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :49

DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery and stand-up

INTERVIEWS: Good choices for your sound bites

ORIGINALITY: Good. Ballroom dancing in the high schools is news to us!

WRITING: Overall good. Try not to ask a question in your story. You want to stick to giving the facts; Who, What, When, Where, Why and How in your script and sound bites

VIDEO: More b-roll would be beneficial. Currently, all your images are wide shots, how about some medium and close-ups. Suggestion: images of feet doing the dance steps.

AUDIO: Good consistent levels for your voice-over and sound bites. Suggestion; use the nat sound from the background music under the beginning of your voice-over and through the dance sequences.

EDITING: See video note. Overall this was fine. More b-roll will help the flow and pace of your story.

OVERALL: We need a :5 second pad at the beginning and end of a story. Currently, this does not have a pad at the end and the timing is short 1 second. We time from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the voice-over/stand-up. We will try to borrow from the beginning pad to air. Thank you.

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Date posted: January 14, 2004
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "PAL Program"
Status:
Length: :50

DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Okay. Try to memorize your script before recording to help with the flow. For your stand-up; smile, this is suppose to be a fun project.

INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?): Good. Suggestion; an interview with a student who is participating in the PAL program.

ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): Good, interesting story.

WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?): Good job writing into the sound bites.

VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): TRI-Pod at all times. Also a variation of images is needed. Currently, all your shots are wide angle, how about some medium and close-ups. You have one images of the classroom and the students backs - no backs please, the audience wants to see people participating in a program and in-order to do that we need to see their expressions. Do you have any additional images you could cut into this piece? (hopefully images which have been shot using a tri-pod.)

AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): Good

EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?): See video note. Also you have two clear clitches in your editing. We believe these are is loose of sync when editing.

OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Please give this one more time in editing.

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Date posted: January 14, 2004
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: Connecticut Teen Center
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50

DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices for interview subjects. A question with the second sound bite: after they went to visit other teen centers "why" did they decide to move forward?

ORIGINALITY: Good

WRITING: A few questions remain open ended in your script; How will they get the funding to open the teen center? Who will run the center? When will the center be opened? This is a good premise, but maybe a story when the center is celebrating it's opening day.

VIDEO: More variation of images is needed to match the images to the script. Exterior shots of your school might not be the best supporting images for a story on a teen center. Also, use your TRI-POD at all times. Please no zooms or pans in a news story unless absolutely necessary to move from one location to another. Try to get your images using close, medium and wide in straight, steady shots.

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: See video notes. Also, be careful not to cut a sound bite in mid sentence.

OVERALL:

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Date posted: December 29, 2003
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Power Puff"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :50

DELIVERY: Good delivery and stand-up.

INTERVIEWS: The sound bites should be used to more the story forward and add information. Also, this is a way to show both sides of the issue. Currently, you only cover the side which claims the sport is not dangerous. Is there another side to this issue?

ORIGINALITY: Good, interesting story if you can broaden this to be of interest to a broad audience. Is this being offered in more high schools. Is there a debate on whether it should be offered. Are there some who still feel girls shouldn't be allowed to play on football teams?

WRITING: See originality.

VIDEO: Please use your tri-pod at all times! Also, no zooms, pans,etc. Try to tell your story with straight shots in difference variations; ie: close-ups, medium and wide angle.

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: The more variation of images you obtain, the easier the editing is. Get plenty of images to use with your script.

OVERALL: Overall this was a good start on your story. Please re-work the script and the sound bites used.

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Date posted: December 29, 2003
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Town of Milford"
Status: Re-submit
Length::48

DELIVERY: Slow down in your voice-over delivery. Try to smile while recording the script, this will add energy without adding speed. Your stand-up would be best if done in front of the "Town of Milford" sign. The story is about Milford not your high school.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices.

ORIGINALITY: Good interesting story.

WRITING: Good job covering the issues.

VIDEO: Tri-pod at all times. Also, please don't zoom or pan with your shots. Get plenty of straight close-ups, medium and wide angle shots to tell your story.

AUDIO: This was very difficult to understand. The nat sound in the beginning overwhelms your voice-over and we can't hear the first portion of your story.

EDITING: Try to match the images to the script. With more images the editing will be easier. You mention the care given to keep the environment in your town, but we see a new house as the image - where's the environment?

OVERALL:

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Date posted: December 29, 2003
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Girls Rock School"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50

DELIVERY: Good voice-over delivery. Try to relax and smile for your ending stand-up - this is suppose to be a fun endeavor!

INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Good sound bites used.

ORIGINALITY: Good - interesting story.

WRITING: Good job on the overall script. Nice job writing into your sound bites.

VIDEO: TRI-POD at all times!!!! No exceptions!. Also, don't forget to get those medium and close-up images. A nice close-up of someone playing the guitar we see would be a wonderful transition. Nice job framing your interviews. Suggestion: get in closer on framing your ending stand-up. Currently, you have a lot of dead space above the reporters head.

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: See video. With more of a variation of images the editing would go easier and smoother.

OVERALL: Nice story.

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Evaluations for 2002-2003

Date posted:7/10/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Fashion Show"
Status: Re-submit
Length:

DELIVERY (How is the voice used to tell the story [pitch, tone, diction]): Good voice-over delivery.

INTERVIEWS (Sound bites interesting and did they enhance the story?):

ORIGINALITY (Story creative, unique, statewide appeal?): When considering a story, ask yourself 'what makes the story unique to Connecticut'.

WRITING (Report written clearly, creatively, & grammatically correct?):

VIDEO (Pix illustrated the story? Tri-pod used, lighting, composition?): It is very difficult to shot in-doors without access to natural light. Many of your images are extremely dark and will not come out when we transfer down one more generation to air.

AUDIO (Clarity, natural sound, enhance the story?): There is very low audio in many places. The audio needs to be on consistent levels throughout the voice-over, sound bites and stand-up.

EDITING(Pictures and sound used in the proper sequence to tell a story? Pictures match the script?):

OVERALL(All the elements used to tell an interesting story for the viewer?): Due to the images and audio we will not be able to air this tape. Thank you.

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Date:7/3/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "New Voices of WPLR"
Status: Broadcast
Length: :50

DELIVERY: Good. Note: in your stand-up the location would have been WPLR and not Jonathan Law H.S.

INTERVIEWS: Good. Note: an interview with the team who recently left the station.

ORIGINALITY:

WRITING:Be careful to get both sides of a story. Currently, this sounds more like a press release then a news story. Go beyond the press release when researching your story.

VIDEO: Good

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: Good job matching your images to your script.

OVERALL:

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Step with Us"
Status: Re-submit Length:

DELIVERY:

INTERVIEWS:

ORIGINALITY:

WRITING:

VIDEO: Many of the images froze for several seconds - is this in your original?? Also, please use a tri-pod at all times.

AUDIO: The natural sound covers your sound bites to such an extent that we can't hear what the interviews are saying as well as much of your voice-over!

EDITING:

OVERALL: Because of the sound difficulties we couldn't understand the voice-over and the sound bites. Of what we could hear we were left with an overall questions: what is "High Step"? and why would the viewing audience outside your school care? Please re-think the premise of your story, re-shot the footage to support the premise and re-edit your sound. Thanks.

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Job Shadowing"
Status: Re-submit
Length:

DELIVERY: Nice pacing. There is a small sound level difference during your voice-over. Try to record your entire voice-over at one time. Also, in your stand-up be sure to use the town you are doing the story in, not the school name. Many viewers might not know where Jonathan Law High School is located.

INTERVIEWS: Good

ORIGINALITY: Interesting story.

WRITING: Creative start to your story.

VIDEO: You need images of students who are actually working at their job shadowing jobs and not just photo's. By having actually footage of the job shadowing you are inviting the audience in to experience the story.

AUDIO: Good

EDITING: You will need actually footage to match with your script.

OVERALL: Please obtain more b-roll footage to support your script and re-submit. Thank you,.

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Senior Lounge"
Status: Re-submit
Length:

DELIVERY: This was fast paced and therefore difficult to understand. The stand-up was very fast and we are still not sure what you said. Please be careful to slow down and wrap up your story before signing off.

INTERVIEWS: Good choices. Be careful not to rely on your interviews to tell your entire story. Pick the best of the interview as your sound bite and use it to move the story forward.

ORIGINALITY: Consider what makes your senior lounge unique and interesting to the rest of the state. Are there other "closed campus" high schools, is Jonathan Law the only one with a senior lounge?

WRITING: There is a sound problem on this tape and therefore we had a very difficult time understanding your script. We don't feel we can give you an evaluation on what we couldn't hear.

VIDEO: More b-roll would be nice. Using straight shots. Try to stay away from pans, tilts and zooms, they are not used in news without a specific reason to the story.

AUDIO: see below

EDITING:

OVERALL: There is a problem with the sound levels on all the tapes from your high school. I check with an in-house editing who took a listen. He suggested there is a level miss-match somewhere in your system. This could be from crossing the lines from your line level to your mic level. Or if you're using professional level equipment with consumer equipment in your editing or dubbing process.

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Mentoring Program"
Status: Re-submit
Length:

DELIVERY: Okay

INTERVIEWS: Good choices

ORIGINALITY: Good

WRITING: Nice job writing into your sound bites. Try not to let your interview tell the entire story. Your script should cover most of the basic Who, What, When, Where, Why and How. There is also a pause in your script/story after the 3rd interview but before the wrap-up.

VIDEO: More close-ups would be good. Once you've established your location tighten up your shots into more medium and tight shots to bring your audience into the story. Same suggestion on your stand-up, this should be from the chest up. The reporter should feel like your in the story, place yourself in the location of your story and make the shot a medium to tight shot.

AUDIO:

EDITING: see video

OVERALL: There is a problem with the sound levels on all the tapes from your high school. I check with an in-house editing who took a listen. He suggested there is a level miss-match somewhere in your system. This could be from crossing the lines from your line level to your mic level. Or if you're using professional level equipment with consumer equipment in your editing or dubbing process.

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "A Real Giant"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :51

DELIVERY: There are pauses and uneven levels in your voice-over. Try to record your voice-over in one sitting, you voice can change from one day to the next.

INTERVIEWS: Your sound bites should add to your story and move it forward. What drives Mr. Robinson to teach and play ball? Does teaching and playing sports compliment each other or is it a challenge? Suggestion: the second interview is a student and what they get out of having a professional football player as a teacher.

ORIGINALITY: Good

WRITING: Stay focused on the premise of your story - what makes Mr. Robinson unique? A suggestion: his drive not only to play professional football but also to teach the next generation of players. The focus is on his community service as a teacher that makes him a hero.

VIDEO: Always use a tripod!! There are also several jump cuts in your editing.

AUDIO: There are several breaks in your audio as well as voice over dub is at different levels.

EDITING: see other notes.

OVERALL We are timing it at 1 seconds over then the required :50 seconds. Please see the notes above and re-think your story layout and focus. You have a good start, it could use another turn in production and editing. Thanks.

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Art Murals"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :49

DELIVERY:Okay

INTERVIEWS: Good choices for subjects.

ORIGINALITY: Good

WRITING: Please see page 12 of the 2003 "How To" Manual for suggestions on how to write into and out of a sound bite.

VIDEO: More b-roll is needed. Please don't use pans or pulls in a news story. It's not a natural movement for peoples eyes and therefore seeing it in a news piece can be disconcerting. News is a straight story telling technique and therefore your images should be as well. Get lots of medium and close-up shots to help in your editing process.

AUDIO: good

EDITING: Your images should match your script. Suggestion: instead of waiting for the ending of the piece to say "see how the murals will look" then showing the murals, places the images within the story as you or the interviewee is mentioning them. this will give the viewers a visual reference during the script. Is the study hall and auditorium the same place? A little unclear in your script and images. Suggestion: when you are introducing an interview (sound bite) show that person ahead of time doing something that will distinguish who they are before you cut to their interview. IE the teacher, let's see her teaching the art class before you cut to her interview.

OVERALL: Please see notes above. This was an interesting story, it just needs to be tightened up. Thanks.

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Date:7/2/03
School: Jonathan Law High School
Town: Milford
Slug: "Milford Indians"
Status: Re-submit
Length: :53

DELIVERY:

INTERVIEWS: Good 1st interview. Your second interview is long - remember to use only the best of the sound bite to move your story forward.

ORIGINALITY: Ask yourself "what makes this story unique to the rest of the state?" and produce to that premise.

WRITING: Remember to cover the all important WHO, WHAT, WHEN, WHERE, WHY & HOW in your script. For those viewers who don't know anything about hockey, more info is needed.

VIDEO: Tri-pod at all times!!! Also, please don't use pans, tilts and pulls. These aren't natural movement for your eyes and therefore news tends to steer clear of them. You need more b-roll with more medium and close-up shots. This will help in your editing process.

AUDIO: There are inconsistent levels between your voice-over and sound bites. Also you have cut the voice-over very close in your editing.

EDITING: see above video and audio

OVERALL: We need the stories to be exactly :50 seconds from the beginning of the voice-over to the end of the stand-up in order to air. Please re-edit to the required time. Thanks.

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