New London High School

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Date: April 20, 2007
School: New London High School
Town: New London
Slug: "Tropical Water Coral Research"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 45

DELIVERY:

INTERVIEWS:

ORIGINALITY:

WRITING:

VIDEO:

AUDIO:

EDITING:

OVERALL: Nice job writing into the interview and adding a voiceover. There is a shot in the middle with no voiceover. What are the coral used for? Is this the only high school that is doing this? Is this a pilot program or in conjunction with Mystic Aquarium or another partner? Stick to a focus and expand. The story is 5 seconds short. The story needs to be 50 seconds to fit in our broadcast schedule.

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Date: March 1, 2007
School: New London High School
Town: New London
Slug: "Tropical Water Coral Research"
Status: Re-Submit
Length: 50

DELIVERY: Work on enunciation and a clear delivery. In television it is so important because you have to be able to capture the viewer's attention right away.

INTERVIEWS: You need to introduce the person that you are interviewing. Tell us who it is. The interview should just a sound bite in the story, not the whole story. Either paraphrase or add info to the piece when you are writing into your interview. For example, "Lisa Smith, a senior at New London High School, has been studying coral for the past year". It seemed like the interview gave you a lot of good information but a lot of that should be used in the voiceover. Pick a good sound bite from the interview to use in the story. One way to use a sound bite is to add emotion or to answer questions like how or why.

ORIGINALITY: Good story selection. Seems like an interesting topic.

WRITING: There really wasn't any writing in this story. Right now your story is just the interview. Remember that you don't want all your information to come from your interview. You want sound bites to support the story. You need to find your hook and then write to it by answering the following questions: WHO, WHAT, WHERE, WHEN, WHY AND HOW in your voiceover. We will send a disc with some stories from last year so you can get an idea of the organization of a news story. Also, watching news packages in the evening news is another good way of becoming familiar with how a news story should be composed.

VIDEO: Very good. Meaningful close ups. Nice shots. Good lighting. Well composed.

AUDIO: Good job making sure the reporter used a microphone, but the interviewee also needs to speak into a mic. The camera mic picks up too much background noise. The reporter should be standing just to the side of the camera so the interviewee is at a good angle, and they should be holding the mic like a flashlight being shined up the interviewee's nose.

EDITING: Nice job on the editing. Don't use supers because we add a wrapper in post-production that will cover them. Any explanation of who someone is or the type of plant needs to be done in the audio because it won't show up on the screen. The text that was used in the end could have been used to wrap up the story. It would be great to have the reporter say something like, "These findings will be presented at an upcoming science competition...". There is no need to mention the date of the science fair because the story will run even after the fair has come and gone. This will keep the story more evergreen. To prepare the story for broadcast, our producers need 5 seconds of b-roll pad at the beginning and end of the story. This is used if the story is a few frames short.

OVERALL: Great first try. Good job selecting a newsworthy story. Very good work on the videography. Work on the writing and put together a voiceover to tell the story with the support of a few sound bites. We would be happy set up a visit to your school to answer any questions and go over the pieces of a news story.

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